video games

[Anonyme]

Dear friend :
I wrote you this letter because lately you were not arround too much and you seemds like you have been taken by something. I asked you momm and she told me that you start to be a kind of addected to video games and online games, and you’ve een spending hours and hours palying , that was the reason that it didn’t gave you time for us your friends . So as your best friend i want to advise and give you some important infos about those games :
Most of the bad effects of video games are blamed on the violence they contain. People who play more violent video games are more likely to have increased aggressive thoughts, feelings, and behaviors, plus ,too much video game playing makes you socially isolated. Also, you may spend less time in other activities such as doing homework, reading, sports, and interacting with the family and friends ! My friend ,games can confuse reality and fantasy and real life is so much different from games .Do you know that video games may also have bad effects on humans health, your health including obesity, video-induced seizure !? and here is the thing that worris me the most when playing online, you can pick up bad language and behavior from other people, and may make your vulnerable to online dangers !
As your friend i wanted to advice you and show you the dark side of those things.I m not saying that video games are so dangrous you must satay away from it , no ! video games are a good way to pass time and to enjoy yourself a littel but don’t get to atteched to it soi t drives you to addection !
Hope you came back and share time with us.
With love .

[Bakhta Prof Anglais]

Hi Sarra, thanks for your participation. I notice that your writing is developing. Good, keep going 😉
Please use the simple present.
Try to avoid the informal language.
Watch your tenses.
Your ideas are well developed and organized.
Here is your essay’s correction:

Dear friend,
I write you this letter because lately you were not around too much as if you were taken by something. I asked your mom and she told me that you start to be a kind of addicted to video games and online games (there is no need to repeat, they are the same thing), and you’ve een spending hours and hours playing. (try to avoid long sentences) Consequently, you lose contact with your friends because you devote all your time to playing. that was the reason that it didn’t gave you time for us your friends . So as your best friend I want to advise you and give you some important information about these games. Most of the bad effects of video games are blamed on for the violence they contain. People who play more violent video games are more likely to have increased aggressive thoughts, feelings, and behaviors. plus Moreover, too much video game playing excessive playing makes you socially isolated. Do you know that video games may also have bad effects on humans health, your health? It may result in including obesity and video-induced seizure !?. and here is the thing that What worries me the most when playing online more is that you can pick up be influenced by bad language and behavior from other people. And it may make your vulnerable to online dangers. Also, (it is better to talk about all the drawbacks of video games together, and then move to the solutions) Instead losing much time on video games, you may spend less time in can engage yourself in other activities such as doing homework, reading, sports, and interacting with the your family and friends. My friend, games can confuse reality and fantasy and because real life is so much different from games .
As your friend, I wanted to advice advise you and show you the dark side of those things (avoid this spoken and informal language) video games. I’m not saying that video games are so dangrous you must satay away from it , no ! it is true that video games are an enjoyable means of entertainment, but try not to be blindly addicted to them. video games are a good way to pass time and to enjoy yourself a littel but don’t get to atteched to it soi t drives you to addection !
I hope you came back and share time with us.
With love,

[Duncan Ducatti]

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