Membremai 9, 2017 à 11:41
Hi Sarra, thanks for your participation. You can do better. Keep going on !
Here is your correction:
Each of us has a mental
eframework which we use it to frame our views of life, to give events and experiences a consistent meaning. This is a part of the personality known as the Attitude.
Attitude means perspective or viewpoint even thoughts ! ==> Each person has his / her own way to frame his /her views about life, and to find the right way to add meaning to experiences and events he/she undergoes. So, having an attitude is to have a specific perspective which one follows to live with himself, and with others.
Negative thoughts, words and attitude,
createresult in negative and unhappy feelings, moods and behavior. When the mind is negative, poisons are released into the blood and the mind , which cause more unhappiness and negativity.(delete, you are repeating yourself).
Is it any wonder that we wantisn’t it better to be around positive people, and prefer to avoid negative ones? A positive person anticipates happiness, health and success , . andThus, he/she believes that he can overcome any obstacle and difficulty. Positive thinking is not a concept that everyone believes and follows. Some, (delete the coma) considereconsider it as nonsense. However, there is a growing number of(avoid this type of generalization, unless you have right statistics that prove this) are people who accept positive thinking as a fact, and believe in its effectiveness.
To use it in your life, you need more than just to be aware of its existence. You need to adopt the attitude of positive thinking in everything you do. (What do you mean by this? Delete it.)
With apositive attitudes we experienceengender pleasant and happy feelings ., which This brings brightness to thebrighten one’s eyes , morewith energy and happiness.
Our whole being broadcasts good will, happiness and success (what do you mean by this? Please avoid repetition). Even our health is affected in a beneficial way. We walk tall, our voice is more powerful,
and our eyes are bright. (you repeat this)
Let me please give you some tips so you can be surrounded by happiness and joy:
One,(first of all) ignore what other people say or think about you. two,Second,
use your imagination to visualize only favorable and beneficial situations
it always helps three,Third, use positive words when talking with others four,4.Then, (you cannot use numbers in writing ! ) try to Smile frequently a little more, as this it helps to think positively. and last thingLast but not least, once a negative thought enterssprouts in your mind replace it with a constructive one. If the negative thought returns, replace it again with a positive one never give up.It is better to give concrete examples for each positive attitude.
Leave now my dears hoping all the best for you .
Give more consistent examples
Avoid using first person pronouns (I – We), use third person pronouns instead.
You have some vague ideas that are repeated
The topic asks you to talk about some negative attitudes in your community, but you keep on talking in a general way, you are repeating yourself.